Great article. I particularly liked what you did with the opening paragraph. The first example is perfectly decent writing, and perfectly poinless - I love the way you show how you can take that and focus is on conflict/character/setting.
However, the question I really want to see answered (can we please have an edittorrent post on the subject? Pretty please with cream on top?) is what comes next. Presumably you'll want to focus the following paragraphs, too - but how do you decide which focal points to choose?
And I can see how a writer who wanders all over the place would create a disunited feeling in the back of the reader's head, while another would give a piece a sense of purpose... but how do you get it right?
If you have an editing question you'd like us to address, feel free to send it to rasley at gmail dot com. We like reader questions because they save us from having to think up post topics on our own. ;)
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Great article. I particularly liked what you did with the opening paragraph. The first example is perfectly decent writing, and perfectly poinless - I love the way you show how you can take that and focus is on conflict/character/setting.
However, the question I really want to see answered (can we please have an edittorrent post on the subject? Pretty please with cream on top?) is what comes next. Presumably you'll want to focus the following paragraphs, too - but how do you decide which focal points to choose?
And I can see how a writer who wanders all over the place would create a disunited feeling in the back of the reader's head, while another would give a piece a sense of purpose... but how do you get it right?
GK, good question!
I do have some thoughts about openings, so I'll see if I can do a post. Mostly I think any focus is better than no focus.
Alicia
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