2. They make love and re-affirm their affection.
3. He sings (he's a musician) a song that's just for her, and she realizes she still loves him, not just as a friend.
4. He tells her why he has found her, what he has to tell her (that another in their group has committed suicide, apparently because he can't deal with the anxiety of the constant threat of the bad guys).
5. She gets mad at him for waiting to tell her, maybe says some angry stuff. (This might be better starting the next chapter?)
Chapter Two:
1. They argue.
2. She gives in because she does love him, and he is who he is, etc.
3. They discuss it, and realize there's something weird about this suicide.
Chapter Three:
1. Start investigating?
2. Attempt on their lives?
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See 2 #3-- because they make up, they're able to talk through the death details, and realize something's weird. That's causal, and I like to do that, the accumulation-- they have to make up at least a bit to collaborate on the discussion, and that leads to the investigation, which leads to the attempt on their lives.
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I think this is a really important post because of how subtle these things are.
My question though: in your scene outline, you have "4. She gets mad at him for waiting to tell her, and they talk it out."
If you rearrange the elements to that he tells her his news AFTER the loving and affirming, she's still going to get mad, and they still need to talk it out. What did I miss? It still ends on resolution. What did you do to solve that?
Sierra, good question-- I think the chapter should end with what he tells her about the death, and maybe her immediate mad reaction. She can end with "Why didn't you tell me first?"
Or something else-- "This is just like you, refusing to tell me until you got what you wanted." So the chapter ends on conflict.
Then the next chapter, they can have the argument and she can decide that he is who he is... but then something else happens, and so her decision is not at the end of the scene, and so isn't an ending, and so there's no sense that this is the actual resolution. I can have a lingering sense from her that this still bothers her. But soon the bad guy is going to find them, so the lingering disquiet will be somewhat underground.
Thanks for helping me think this through!