Clearly, that author was not talking about me, despite my sometimes slow reading response times. Apologies for my recent lack of blogging, but blogging is for fun, and work does come first. The good news is that we've got two new acquisitions editors hard at work on our backlog, my injuries from the car wreck are about 98% healed, the Red Sage 15th Anniversary celebration is more or less planned, and there are fewer than 80 pending manuscripts in my inbox. Things are starting to feel almost normal again. (knock wood)
So. Where were we? Oh, right. Log lines.
Here's a pair from Beth, who blogged about finding our blog through Janet Reid's blog. Bet you can't say that five times fast.
After a teen girl who's been cryogenically frozen on a generation space ship is woken up fifty years before the ship's due to land on a new planet, she must work with the future leader of the ship to find the person who is unplugging (and thereby killing) the other cryogenically frozen people...before her parents are unplugged.
After two teens on a generation space ship discover a plot to kill the cryogenically frozen people on board, they also discover a terrible secret about the ship, and must decide whether it's better to tell the truth or let everyone else live in happy ignorance.
Anybody know what a generation space ship is?
My first thought is that I want to play mix and match with this pair. In no particular order, here are the things that jump out at me.
- I want the teen girl instead of two teens, because it gives a clear protagonist.
- The whole fifty years thing seems like a distraction.
- The plot to kill the other cryogenically frozen people is interesting. And probably is the plot.
- Her parents. There's your stakes.
- How can the others live in happy ignorance if they're being picked off in their sleep?
If we scramble the bits, we might end up with something like,
After a teen girl on a generation space ship discovers a plot to kill the cryogenically frozen people on board, she must work with the future leader of the ship to find the person who is killing the other cryogenically frozen people...before her parents are unplugged.
Still not perfect. Teen girl is okay because it signals YA, but I'd like something that indicates character. Throw me an adjective. Lonely teen girl. Or a character tag. Prom queen.
But it does now sound like an interesting story, doesn't it? I can easily imagine wanting to read this one. What does everyone think?