Hi. Here are my two loglines for my dark fantasy: 1. An innocent boy and his emotionless protector struggle for survival when a powerful demon becomes interested in the boy's destiny.
2. An innocent boy is caught in a violent tug-a-war between humans and demons when both sides believes he is their prophesized messiah.
Thank you. - Amber (you may use my name)
I like the second one more because I like the "tug-of-war"-- that so precisely describes what's happening. Notice though that you have "both"(plural) with "believes" (singular). "Each" might actually be better.
Is "prophesized" the word? Prophesied?
You're really using conflict words here-- tug of war, violent, between. That's good-- it's kind of bristly.