Susan Helene Gottfried said...
Crazy Western Martian here... but that first go-round with our paragraph created, for me, a sense of melancholy and tone. Why isn't that a helpful way to advance the story?
Well, if you can justify it, it's got some meaning, right? But is it the meaning you want at this very juncture in this story? I think melancholy might not be the aim of this story-- it's about a wedding, so it's probably a comedy. And juxtaposition and timing are all important in a comedy. I'd say paragraphing appropriately is MORE, not less, important, with comedy, because paragraphs are how we do "timing" in print.
So the point is... does the paragraphing convey what you want? Not "convey something" -- it's always going to convey something because a paragraph is a signifier of meaning, and readers are always going to find some meaning in the way you paragraph. But is that the meaning you want for this juncture in this story? If this is a comedy, I would want the paragraph to set up (probably) a joke or comic moment to come.
That initial paragraph-- read again-- yes, has some existential weight. There is no meaning because there is no meaning-- life is meaningless, grass is green, there are a lot of reasons but not worth speaking aloud. :)
Just right for a novel about a male college professor who didn't get tenure.