So, over at Romance University, we had a little fun with romance cliches for Valentine's Day. In the run-up to the game, we talked about doing bios or other samples in the spirit of what we intended. So this is the one I came up with that was meant to be a self-mocking bio:
Unaware of the effect her hazel eyes were having on the contest entry, her auburn locks floated on the summer breeze. What powerful, strong, throbbing prose, she thought silently to herself. But only one entry could dominate this vixen judge. She stomped her foot for no apparent reason. How dare all these other entries make her read them? Just because she's an editor doesn't mean...mean...mean...something or other.
We didn't use it at RU, so I thought it would be fun to use it here instead as a pop quiz of sorts. What wrong with this paragraph? Some are to do with style, and some with content, but all are things I've seen so often I hope never to see them again. Post your answers in the comments, and let's see if as a group you can catch them all.