Here's a sentence that I felt was wrong-- wrong rhythm or something-- and couldn't figure out what. I'm not trying single anyone out (this is from a book review I was reading-- don't know the author), but I did wonder if it's an example of an author trying to cram too much into one sentence?
That fictionalized version of his own turbulent adolescence, sexual proclivities and drug use made Elliott a cult favorite, known for transforming brutal experience into piercingly honest prose.
How would you revise that?
I'm thinking at first glance, there are too many adjectives-- each ends up depriving the next one of some power.