tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post3618748911477842698..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: Rachel line editsEdittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-128604721419956852009-07-11T19:15:20.462-05:002009-07-11T19:15:20.462-05:00Hi Rachel,
I just had one suggestion to add to Al...Hi Rachel,<br /><br />I just had one suggestion to add to Alicia's comments. Instead of the word awe, maybe something like "disbelief" or "anticipation". In other words, as Alicia pointed out, awe is one of those words that is hard to make feel <b>concrete</b> to the reader unless it's <i>very</i> clear <b>why</b> the character is feeling that way. So maybe try to think of what other emotions the character might be experiencing at the same time.<br /><br />Hope this helps!<br />Jami G.Jami Goldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00957122956518765455noreply@blogger.com