tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post2287143326174273446..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: HeidiEdittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-34412349474160218152009-06-19T09:51:42.464-05:002009-06-19T09:51:42.464-05:00I meant to come back and respond to this much soon...I meant to come back and respond to this much sooner, but real life and the lack of internet interfered.<br /><br />Thank you for taking the time to look at this honestly and tell me what -exactly- makes the paragraph confusing. Obviously I have much to learn and this only made it hit home that much harder. The changes are excellent, though obviously not exactly how my character would speak, so I won't be making the changes vebatum, but I will be taking the suggestion of being specific to heart. After all, the character -is- a mercenary, she wouldn't beat around the bush, especially when she's talking about what she does for a living.<br /><br />Again, thank you. I've enjoyed reading all of these edits. They're all helpful and just plain interesting to read. They give insight into just how editors work.Heidihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18030304565924815326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-80597227633950979172009-06-17T05:38:08.652-05:002009-06-17T05:38:08.652-05:00Wow - the power of "client" makes a huge...Wow - the power of "client" makes a huge difference to the impact of the last line. I like the changes.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14565683058021299230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-76544119287182379692009-06-16T17:56:55.073-05:002009-06-16T17:56:55.073-05:00I've thought, often, about vocab and choosing ...I've thought, often, about vocab and choosing the right word for the sentence. This example has brought the principal to life. It's hard to know, without seeing the whole story, but the relatively minor changes of choosing a slightly different word makes a huge impact.Sylviahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05925593802209715440noreply@blogger.com