tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post8257699901481325877..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: Wandering eyes... and other body partsEdittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-87265130638349541622012-04-07T23:08:08.441-05:002012-04-07T23:08:08.441-05:00The first time i learned about this mistake, it wa...The first time i learned about this mistake, it was a critique partner laughing her butt off at this sentence in my wip: she caught his eye, dancing and bobbing in the square with the other men. <br /><br />I was like, "whats so funny??"Christine Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08711726941768571495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-87023414897855575902012-04-04T23:16:42.307-05:002012-04-04T23:16:42.307-05:00Wes, do you think it works to just change it to &q...Wes, do you think it works to just change it to "gaze?"<br />His gaze wandered to her shapely ankles.<br /><br />She caught his gaze and returned it.<br />?<br />AEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-59694955256642024142012-04-03T14:18:42.154-05:002012-04-03T14:18:42.154-05:00Guilty.
I didn't realize how much I had overu...Guilty.<br /><br />I didn't realize how much I had overused some aspect of eyes until Theresa pointed it out in my MS. Thanks, T.Weshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-23251493459510908652012-04-02T16:17:41.264-05:002012-04-02T16:17:41.264-05:00Tice, Thanks-- I love examples. And you're rig...Tice, Thanks-- I love examples. And you're right, pouring eyes are pretty gross.<br />I remember when authors used to have lines like "Sapphire eyes gripped emerald." It was considered sort of evocative. Maybe we've just all seen too many horror movies, and imagine eyes on stalks, pouring, combing, gripping-- I mean, we've seen those. <br />AEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-64992086753442959932012-04-02T13:19:17.579-05:002012-04-02T13:19:17.579-05:00Eyes dropping and rolling are always lots of fun.Eyes dropping and rolling are always lots of fun.Jane Georgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17437053139837857703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-14317839557004051982012-04-02T11:27:16.525-05:002012-04-02T11:27:16.525-05:00Thanks for this. I'm still laughing. Wandering...Thanks for this. I'm still laughing. Wandering body parts are one of my favorites.Stephaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09020966780454775460noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-83635599320331266672012-04-02T07:55:42.548-05:002012-04-02T07:55:42.548-05:00I just read a book that had memorable sentences su...I just read a book that had memorable sentences such as: <i>His eyes lit up as they poured into mine</i> and <i>his eyes combed my face</i>. Pouring, combing eyes give me the creeps :)Tacy Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10666637252612502220noreply@blogger.com