tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post7434413913405344140..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: An Historical OpeningEdittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-64445792294404293352008-05-19T14:53:00.000-05:002008-05-19T14:53:00.000-05:00Great post. I stumbled over here via a writing fri...Great post. I stumbled over here via a writing friend. I'm not sure, but I think I might be guilty of overwriting. I've had the terms, "pretty", "lyrical," and "wordy" applied to me.<BR/><BR/>I write instinctively, so what IS overwriting, how do I recognize it in myself, and how do I stop it if and when I do it? <BR/><BR/>and Thanks! I'll defintely be reading more often.Rachelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11314429932343190739noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-45805644129684429002008-05-19T07:27:00.000-05:002008-05-19T07:27:00.000-05:00Thank you. Yes, it is my first. And I will liste...Thank you. Yes, it is my first. And I will listenWeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-87537364660841084402008-05-18T14:34:00.000-05:002008-05-18T14:34:00.000-05:00Wes, if this is your first effort, I'm even more i...Wes, if this is your first effort, I'm even more impressed. You must be one of those writers gifted with a natural ear. Listen for the high, clear notes in your paragraphs. They'll never steer you wrong.<BR/><BR/>TheresaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-88516157411642242812008-05-18T13:14:00.000-05:002008-05-18T13:14:00.000-05:00loved the prose - it just got a bit rich, as green...loved the prose - it just got a bit rich, as green knight suggested. sometimes when we as writers have a thick tapestry going, we neglect to focus on the main image we want to convey. then it's time to choose which is more important.<BR/><BR/>great analysis!Bobbie (Sunny) Colehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10039523903143674505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-28187645413908972612008-05-17T08:27:00.000-05:002008-05-17T08:27:00.000-05:00Theresa,Thank you for your thorough and thoughtful...Theresa,<BR/><BR/>Thank you for your thorough and thoughtful analysis of my opening. Since I discovered your blog a few months ago, I've been amazed at how deeply you and Alicica can analyze three or four sentences. Studying your critiques and expositions on writing has helped me in my first attempt at fiction.<BR/><BR/>You are correct in that I lean towards overwriting, and I'm trying to correct that. Also with sips and slurps I was trying to show how anything along a long continuum of water quality was suitable.<BR/><BR/>Hopefully I can refine my technique and produce a serious book that tells the story of desperate people dealing with Spain's failed colonial policy, slavery as practiced in the Southwest, and Manifest Destiny.<BR/><BR/>Alicia’s book on point of view has helped greatly too.<BR/><BR/>Again, thank youWeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-17790607160858038062008-05-16T07:01:00.000-05:002008-05-16T07:01:00.000-05:00I like it, even though it was a little too rich fo...I like it, even though it was a little too rich for me. And my backbrain thinks it's set in Texas - slave + dry creeks. The sips and slurps didn't work for me at all, and overall, I found the analysis pretty much on the spot. It's specific, it asks questions, it contains contrasts and inherent tension. <BR/><BR/>I'd definitely pick this up and read on.green_knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16499896006012152260noreply@blogger.com