tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post3888625313942655101..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: Where Were We? Oh, Right. Pitch #3.Edittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-75065181160755479812008-05-29T11:46:00.000-05:002008-05-29T11:46:00.000-05:00I think any character who lives boldly will be of ...I think any character who lives boldly will be of interest. I like con artist stories because these are outside-the-box characters with big personalities and clever minds. In our real lives, we might be the kind of people who always pay our bills on time and give up our bus seats to pregnant women, but in the world of fiction we can be lawless and dashing. Con artists have that Robin Hood flair. Gotta love 'em.<BR/><BR/>TheresaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-9399437009559224032008-05-29T05:16:00.000-05:002008-05-29T05:16:00.000-05:00Oh! This is my pitch!Now that you've mentioned you...Oh! This is my pitch!<BR/><BR/>Now that you've mentioned you approach these pitches as they'd sound verbally, I understand the adjustments made to them. In the process, I've discovered just how difficult it is to condense a story that has a lot going on into a short paragraph!<BR/><BR/>Thanks!Evangeline Hollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00132593133675388609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-19023192809332127092008-05-28T21:36:00.000-05:002008-05-28T21:36:00.000-05:00I like it that she's identified as a con artist ri...I like it that she's identified as a con artist right up front. I love books about con artists. Hard to credit, since I'm a really law-abiding sort.<BR/>AliciaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-80668542161719974542008-05-28T18:21:00.000-05:002008-05-28T18:21:00.000-05:00Theresa, yes, I understand. Some of us would say t...Theresa, yes, I understand. Some of us would say the two differently, of course - INto vs. IN TO. Just FWIW - no biggy.Dave Shawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00773380114295267509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-14847671731813607752008-05-28T16:43:00.000-05:002008-05-28T16:43:00.000-05:00The first thing that caught my attention was Dr. L...The first thing that caught my attention was Dr. Livingston. And I'm afraid to say that it's a dealbreaker.<BR/><BR/>I can't comment much on the rest of this - romance is not a genre I read, and saying that this doesn't work for me is not, I feel, a fair comment. <BR/><BR/>However, I feel that the turn-of-the-century NY should come at the beginning of the pitch; it shapes the book.green_knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16499896006012152260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-7319658819094121532008-05-28T12:59:00.000-05:002008-05-28T12:59:00.000-05:00Yes, that's right, but we wouldn't hear the differ...Yes, that's right, but we wouldn't hear the difference during a pitch. I'm trying to approach these written examples as if they were actually being pitched to me in person. But yes, you're right about that.<BR/><BR/>TheresaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-9534174920758824882008-05-28T12:12:00.000-05:002008-05-28T12:12:00.000-05:00A very tiny grammatical quibble:'Turning her into ...A very tiny grammatical quibble:<BR/><BR/>'Turning her into the police' does NOT mean the same thing as 'turning her in to the police'. The first makes me think he's engaging the services of Hermione Granger... ;-)Dave Shawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00773380114295267509noreply@blogger.com