tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post2494432734693256971..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: Action and dialogue replacing deep POVEdittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-81811430621461538402012-02-26T01:10:29.413-06:002012-02-26T01:10:29.413-06:00GK, I have to put all that I've cut into a &qu...GK, I have to put all that I've cut into a "cut doc" because I can't quite bear to let it go. :)<br /><br />Wes, I don't use italics for internal monologue usually. It's so visually distracting. I like to just tag it with "he thought" or "she mused." And put it in first person and present tense:<br /><br />I don't really care that much for italics, she mused. But I do like dashes!<br /><br />AliciaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-6873027182235102132012-02-25T15:49:00.110-06:002012-02-25T15:49:00.110-06:00Usually a scene has setting, action, dialogue, tho...<i>Usually a scene has setting, action, dialogue, thought and feeling (from the POV character), or some combination thereof.</i><br /><br />You rang? <br /><br />I have just - I swear, *before* reading this post - stripped out 1500 words from my WIR. Yes, it developed a relationship, but most of it goes over ground we've almost reached already or that we'll reach again very soon. <br /><br />So now I have 93 words doing the same job, and the pacing is much improved.green_knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16499896006012152260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-71002891460516467172012-02-25T15:42:55.069-06:002012-02-25T15:42:55.069-06:00When is use of italics too much, if ever, to repre...When is use of italics too much, if ever, to represent IM? I have two chapters that are nearly all IM because a slave is among his masters and thinking. I can't express his toughts in dialogue because he has no peers to talk to.Weshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-64550886566511327462012-02-25T14:52:04.501-06:002012-02-25T14:52:04.501-06:00Thanks, Alicia. I suspec there is no one answer. ...Thanks, Alicia. I suspec there is no one answer. I propose that it is a matter of segmentation of the market. One segment will want to delve into the why's and wherefore's, and another segment will want full explanations. But then, maybe I'm just being lazy.Weshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-76652108436414044222012-02-25T13:31:53.780-06:002012-02-25T13:31:53.780-06:00Jenny, yes, and Brackmann does it in a contemporar...Jenny, yes, and Brackmann does it in a contemporary voice-- impressive!<br /><br />Wes, I've been thinking about that too, how to conceal without being annoyingly cryptic, and how to guide readers -towards- understanding without forcing it on them. I haven't figured it out! Maybe just formulating what in any passage you want the reader to get will help.<br /><br />Good question, anyway, and it brings up how we're aiming at readers with different levels of willingness to "Delve," as I call it. Anyway, I'll think about this more and maybe blog about it.<br />AliciaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-29370392522009323722012-02-25T13:21:31.640-06:002012-02-25T13:21:31.640-06:00Alicia,
You have enough material in this post for...Alicia,<br /><br />You have enough material in this post for a week, and that is not a complaint.<br /><br />I don't expect specific answers, but I'm having several problems (a lot of people will second that opinion). One is that I'm trying to write in deep POV, but when I put thoughts in internal monologue I end up with a lot of text in italics. When is too much?<br /><br />The other is that I don't want to spoon feed reactions to readers, but have them think about reactions and conssequences. I can see both sides of the issue. I need to provide enough information to explain a character's actions, but I don't want to take the intrigue from the reader.<br /><br />I guess I'll find my way by trial an error, but that is an inefficient way to learn.<br /><br />I said "several problems". There are more, but these are enough for now.Weshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-35111029528032437542012-02-25T09:21:50.844-06:002012-02-25T09:21:50.844-06:00An author who does a brilliant job of cramming a h...An author who does a brilliant job of cramming a huge amount of information into very sparse phrases while writing in a first person POV is Lisa Brackmann author of Rock Paper Tiger. I can study her writing for hours without figuring out quite how she does it, but she does it.Jennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17384082448952856117noreply@blogger.com