tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post1580216203692374644..comments2023-09-05T12:51:25.656-05:00Comments on edittorrent: Muffled SoundsEdittorrenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-91747319265779758312011-05-07T12:47:34.833-05:002011-05-07T12:47:34.833-05:00Very interesting how paying attention to such smal...Very interesting how paying attention to such small changes really improves a paragraph.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-35479233232495757562011-05-05T22:00:16.083-05:002011-05-05T22:00:16.083-05:00Theresa, Yep, those suggestions worked great! (R...Theresa, Yep, those suggestions worked great! (Raise you hand if you're surprised.) *stretches her hands toward the floor* :)Jami Goldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00957122956518765455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-2622399563818709592011-05-05T20:38:36.826-05:002011-05-05T20:38:36.826-05:00Neat input! Sounds are interesting, as are what k...Neat input! Sounds are interesting, as are what kind of music characters like—if they like music at all.<br /><br />You needn't go to another platform if having problems with comments. There are other platforms you can use, like DisQus, with Blogger. I'd been having some comment form issues on my site, hacked the code to repair it, and just encountered another comment form issue on someone else's blog, so I'm installing DisQus now.Carradeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05431561739001270522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-21661209765341289512011-05-05T20:01:27.808-05:002011-05-05T20:01:27.808-05:00Joel,
*ugh* I just recently purged that improper ...Joel,<br /><br />*ugh* I just recently purged that improper use of "with" from my prose, so I empathize. :) I had: He turned off the burner with a roll of his eyes. LOL! Really? That's an unusual superpower. :) Good luck!Jami Goldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00957122956518765455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-45831295480424031332011-05-05T19:58:58.486-05:002011-05-05T19:58:58.486-05:00Ah, Theresa, such a smart woman you are. :) Ther...Ah, Theresa, such a smart woman you are. :) There is indeed resonance with the word "deadened." This scene takes place when the MC's emotions are deadened (even more so than usual) as well.<br /><br />Thanks for your other suggestions! I'll take a look at how they would fit in. :)Jami Goldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00957122956518765455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-6568335875170941162011-05-05T09:09:15.731-05:002011-05-05T09:09:15.731-05:00Coleen, that is a lot of S sounds. I think -- I co...Coleen, that is a lot of S sounds. I think -- I could be wrong about this -- that Thomas wasn't submitting this as a fiction writing sample but as a description of the nature and quality of sound in that type of room, so I didn't look at words or sentence structure. I looked instead at the type of image created. But yes, you're right, it's a lot of S sounds.<br /><br />TheresaEdittorrenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14295505709568570553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824896765631412903.post-55022781032302255882011-05-05T02:08:12.313-05:002011-05-05T02:08:12.313-05:00'A soft sound of silence surrounded me, numbin...'A soft sound of silence surrounded me, numbing my senses'<br /><br />Is it just me, or are there just a couple of ess sounds too many?Coleennoreply@blogger.com